The main issue my tutor had was that I didn’t get ‘the money shot’ and I completely agree. Originally I never intended to get this shot, and wanted to demonstrate more of what goes on ‘behind the scenes’. I’ve touched on this – but with some editing it could be better, and more in-depth.
I don’t feel that my images need altering and it’s not the kind of thing you can revisit, but more the layout and wording of the ‘article’. I’m no magazine designer either, so my skills in that area are somewhat limited. However, i’ve made all the relevant changes that I was advised to.
The key issues raised by my tutor were:
- There were a couple of colour balance issues but nothing too bad. I would revisit the images for colour and texture before printing to make sure your colour balance is correct. At the moment the first colour image has a blue/magenta cast, the second a yellow cast, the first texture image a yellow/green/cyan cast and the last texture image looks a little dark.
I have gone back over my prints and corrected these issues and am much happier with the results.
In both shots, regardless of the colour of backdrop the alterations have made the many different shades of wood much more apparent.
Again this was more of a colour issue, and the alterations have greatly improved the shot.
My camera was producing some very unusual shutter speeds, and this was not in fact a result of my conversions. I have however, revised all speeds to a more understandable display as rightfully suggested by my tutor. (At the time of shooting I was very confused by the readings I was seeing on the LCD screen.) The amendments are:
White – 0.1 seconds
Black – 0.6 seconds
White – 2.5 seconds
Black – 3 seconds
White – 0.6 seconds
Black – 0.6 seconds
White – 0.4 seconds
Black – 0.6 seconds
Overall my tutors comments were positive and only offered a few ‘tweaks’ to the pics.
- The yellow colour accent works, although perhaps not totally successfully. As you note, the yellow flower is a little small. Perhaps in a large print it would stand out more, but I think it is more the fact that it is so overwhelmed b y the much larger plant coming out of the wall above it. The pink accent however is much more effective –it stands out and draws the eye straight to the flower.
- In a couple of the photographs you are looking up at widows. This works well in terms of the assignment but in terms of producing a successful photograph, you might get better results by moving back some way and using a longer lens. This will help to reduce the amount you obviously have to point the lens upwards, and so reduce the perspective distortion a bit. Ideally you would want to be on the same level as the window, but I realise this is a tricky proposition. The one with the blue window is also not straight (but I do like the little bits of greenery creeping into the top of the frame!)
For accent i’ve cropped the original shot to make the yellow flower much more prominent, it may still be slightly small, but I think it works well as an accent as the rest of the shot is fairly bland. It was far too lost in the original shot. It helps that it’s just off centre, as your eye is drawn to that area of the image almost straight away.
For the complimentary colour shot with the blue window i’ve rotated it slightly. I didn’t want to crop the foliage out as I like what it adds to the picture.
It’s still slightly off centre, and this was a problem with my positioning and obstacles in the way.
I am very aware that several of my shots could have benefitted from using a telephoto lens (i’m yet to add to the collection) for example, as this would have significantly reduced the upwards angle that the shots have. It would have helped to reduce the distortion. However, I made the most out of the equipment I have, while also trying to get as high up as i physically could.
The main points raised by my tutor were:
- Single Point: The grape photo works and the eye is drawn to the grape but I do wonder if you would not have been left with a cleaner photo that responded more directly to the theme if you had removed the grape from the stalk. I reviewed the contact sheets and didn’t see this option. As the rest of the photos are all presented in a cleaner, more commercial manner, the grape picture would have fitted into the series more without the stalk.
Single point revised:
I agree with my tutors comments and decided to go for a cleaner shot, removing the stalk. I think it works much better as there is zero confusion and one single point, as required.
- Two Point: I agree that this is a successful picture and would fit a lifestyle magazine/website well. I wasn’t totally convinced by it representing ‘two points’ though –the bowl and contents is one point –perhaps a drink or napkin/cutlery to the side would have given you a second point?
I decided to steer away from the bowl of pasta shot (due to deadlines and a broken studio light) and try to incorporate and object that can deliberately be made into two points.. It follows on from the food theme, and also from the red grape. I like the reflection of the cork. I also wanted to see if you could have a two point picture with 2 very different sized objects. I think this has been successful.
Two points revised:
- Several Points in a deliberate shape: I had a couple of issues with this image. The first was procedural –you have included two slightly different variants in the submission but just one in the assignment overview. When it comes to assessment you will want to present just one. The more pressing issue is the depth of focus isn’t really working –having the blurred piece of sushi in the front is distracting to the viewer –the eye is taken straight to this one and you end up hunting through the image to find what is in focus. Perhaps if the front piece was the one in focus and the others soft it would be more successful? Compare this to the walnut photo where you have the dominant front half of the walnut in focus and you can see where that image is a success compared to the sushi image.
Several points in a deliberate shape revised:
I’ve taking my tutors comments on board and re-shot the sushi image – with the 3 prominent sushi rolls (in the deliberate shape) in full focus, with a softer focus on all surrounding sushi rolls. I feel this has produced a much stronger image.
- Pattern: You have some camera shake here –you can see when you blow the photo up that the scales are a bit soft because the lens has moved slightly. This is easy to avoid, just make sure you are using a shutter speed fast enough to eliminate the issue if working handheld (as a rule of thumb, at least 1/the focal length of the lens, so 1/60th for a 50mm lens, 1/250th for a 200mm lens etc)
This was generally a hard shot to get right as I was using a macro add on ring (good budget buy) but it’s results can be blurred. I re-visited the shot, this time with a tripod to eliminate any shake. I think the front on positioning makes a cleaner and more pleasing composition.
I’ve now moved on to my second module – Digital Photographic Practise (PDD)
It’s exciting to be starting a new chapter – once i’ve thoroughly read through the OCA booklet I will be beginning with the part 1: Workflow….